MSPA fan-fiction

**nextian** · 08-04-2010, 11:22 AM

Sorry breccia I need to be a thirteen year old girl for a second

**Solaris** · 08-04-2010, 01:07 PM

breccia, once again, there is nothing about that that is not wonderful.
I really wish that I could send you the fic all colored like I did for Raiser and Lotus, but it would take more than 4 PMs!
Anyway, I love it. I love everything about it.
Especially the ending, he rips his computer apart from pure unrelenting anger.
I really like characters getting Karkat to new levels of anger.

**northernVehemence** · 08-04-2010, 01:18 PM

breccia, that was amazing. I loved Tavros being like "what's it like?"

special thanks to Valter and Damanation -- you guys are fantastic. I am definitely not a writer, and I've learned my lesson. Thank you so much for editing this godawful fic and coaching me on everything (because I am an idiot who doesn't outline stuff first, so I had no idea how to end it). Honestly, if it weren't for you two I would have just given up after the first couple parts. Thanks.

Also, everyone in pesterlite who looked over the fic last night. You guys are cool.

Anyway, without further ado, here's the final part of Hemophobe (yes I'm using that title! lol)

I might write an epilogue when we get a little bit more information about what happens to the trolls. We'll see! Again, thank you all for being so encouraging. I'm gonna go back to doodling now. :I

**mediokreKarapase** · 08-04-2010, 01:33 PM

Freaking amazing Breccia. It took me an awful lot of effort to avoid bursting out laughing in my office here.

nV. You are also amazing. Phenomenal story.

**Solaris** · 08-04-2010, 01:36 PM

God the idea of Karkat just going up to the trolls and cutting himself and then basically telling them to fuck off is pure awesome.
Also, nV as i said before any fic involving unparalleled Karkat anger is freaking awesome, just because I like it so much.
It was really good and I am glad that you were able to come up with an ending.

**nextian** · 08-04-2010, 01:43 PM

You know, this might be a pretty weird thing to say about a fic in which Karkat tells all of survivng troll society to fuck off, but my favorite part of that is how actually Terezi and Sollux are awesome friends. The, er, bloodlust of the last line and Sollux's semiridiculous ability to make Karkat Get The Fuck Up -- it's wonderful.

The fact that you got it betaed is clear, too, because it reads more smoothly than the last parts. But that is because good writers need good editors!

**Bardic Feline** · 08-04-2010, 02:09 PM

nV: Well done! That was a pretty satisfying ending; I felt like it was the way Karkat might have revealed himself in the actual comic. ^_^ Now I'm going to amuse myself with the thoughts of those trolls (Vriska) who tried to bribe Terezi into telling them Karkat's blood color...only to have it all made completely unnecessary a few minutes later when he just out and tells them himself. XD

I wonder...if he'd held out on telling everyone, how long it would have taken for some of the more devious trolls to try, say, booby-trapping his door with sharpened trip wire?

**PaulPower** · 08-04-2010, 02:14 PM

So a while back we were talking about fics of possible stuff from the "Bad Future" timeline and I got thinking. We know that Jade's meteor hasn't hit yet in the main timeline, and we're already a few hours past the point where the timelines split. So Jade's got a few hours in the "Bad Future" timeline before the meteor hits.

So here's a conversation between Dave and Jade from the start of that timeline. Obviously it's kind of dark (at least, as dark as something can get with Jade in it), but there's also a bit of light at the end of the tunnel because they talk a bit about how Dave might learn time travel at some point.

Actually for the sake of argument, let's call it Dark. It kinda fits, in an "opposite to Light" sort of way: that was a conversation between Rose and John, and this is one between Dave and Jade. And like I say, it is pretty dark.

**Solaris** · 08-04-2010, 02:16 PM

Man, Jade is so freaking optimistic.
It makes me want to cry.

Originally Posted by Bardic Feline

I wonder...if he'd held out on telling everyone, how long it would have taken for some of the more devious trolls to try, say, booby-trapping his door with sharpened trip wire?

With these BlueBloods?
I say about 5 days.

**Tenebrais** · 08-04-2010, 03:29 PM

NV, please don't stop writing! You have talent.

I'd like to write my own version of the Bad Future events (probably a more depressing one, since I want to break from the pattern of all the others where Jade accepts her fate calmly) but it seems like it's kinda over done by now...
Hell, what with this other idea I've got rattling around in my mushy gourd I've got a lot of fanfic irons in the fire.

**Frankie the Tomboy** · 08-04-2010, 03:42 PM

I would just like to congratulate everyone who wrote fics form page 69+ on their excellency and high standards. I'm thinking we should make a book of collaborative fanfic efforts, wait til it becomes a bestseller, then bitch over who gets the most money.
But we won't bitch because we're all lovely people (except me) and we're all married anyway so it'll just go into a joint account and we can all have cool cars and cool shades and be cooler than Strider which would be badass.

Also I apologise for not being around to boost morale a bit because I was busy being a useless piece of shit all day and playing all these GAMES. I think video games has devoured my passion for writing bad things and pretending I am good because I seem to slack off too much so yeah I probably won't be writing much/any more. I slack off sleeping and eating and waking up. This is how I live during the summer; in a state of stasis.

Keep up the good work!

Seriously that's not morale-boosting it's sincere I fucking love you all.

**paperandpencil** · 08-04-2010, 03:58 PM

NV and Breccia, you are both jaw-droppingly talented! Both of you have a great style of writing and great ideas for fics that are really exciting to read! Everyone is in character too, and I think you both use the characters to their fullest potential within the stories you have written.

NV, I was on the edge of my seat the whole time that I was reading, you made me realize how heavy Karkat's burden is. I was nervous and sympathetic for him the entire time! I think my favorite part were these few lines-

But Karkat was different. Not only was he lower -- far lower -- on the hemochrome spectrum, he liked to believe he was smarter than they were. More of a survivalist. He had learned to fall back on grey for everything.

Whew, I get a lot of raw emotion from Karkat here! A strange mix of anger, inferiority, and a secret pride in himself. The ending absolutely blew me away! I hope Andrew has Karkat reveal his color like that! Please write more, it was a pleasure reading Hemophobia and I would love to see other fics from you!

Breccia, you have most definitely solidified Karkat/Sollux as my OTP! I am not lying when I say that everytime I see a post from you on the forums, I check your signature for another fic, meaning that I end up checking to see if you've written some more several times every day! I expected the sequel to include lots of Karkat and Sollux since the story *is* about them after all, but what you did with the other characters was very clever! You did a great job of conveying an increasing sense of chaos and frenzy, and Karkat's silence was a brilliant idea! By having him say nothing, you conveyed more than I think would be possible through actual words! Your CG/TA fics are ridiculously enjoyable to read. Like, you don't even know how giddy they make me.

TL;DR- I adore you both.

**love** · 08-04-2010, 04:16 PM

@breccia: that was amazing ;O; srsly i laughed so hard, it was really good xDD and you did a great job keeping all the trolls in character (o o)d

@nV: aw, I'm kind of sad to see it end xDD But that was a great, you're a talented to writer. I hope you decide to do that epilogue : D

**Sushi Database** · 08-04-2010, 09:40 PM

Shenanigans, part one

He really, really, really should've alchemized the AC before he'd left.

Dave wiped the sweat from his brow. It wasn't that he couldn't deal with the heat. He had grown up in the top floor of a skyscraper apartment in the southwest. As a point of fact, it got hot. But here there were no fans, no air conditioning, and most importantly, no wind. For the most part the Land of Heat and Clockwork seemed to be the inside of a giant machine, with a molten core. The nature of the machine? Unknown. It encompassed everything and seemed to accomplish nothing. But the atmosphere of the planet, for the most part, was the inside of a cave. Stale and hot and constantly moving. When wind did blow, it was impossible to discern where it was coming from. The residents alternated between aggressively hostile beasts and clueless expositionbots. It was not, in other words, a nice planet to visit.

And for the past six weeks, it had not been a nice place to live. He did not know how long it had been along the objective timeline. Almost a day, maybe? He had made at least a hundred reverses by now, trying to stay as close to possible to the critical point in time. Seeing past versions of himself and retracing their steps had stopped being surprising about five weeks ago. The Land of Heat and Clockwork was filled with Daves, and for the most part he (they?) tried to stay out of his (their?) way, or at least keep contact brief and conversation light. communicating with past selves, or future ones for that matter, could only disrupt their plan to make as much widespread progress as possible.

Dave's acquisition of the turntables from the indigenous Gearmen and Gristgolems had provided them with a strategy: revert to a previous save point, but cheat and bring progress back with them. Only Dave could go back, so he focused on finding as many plot-critical items as possible and climbing the echeladder so he'd be stronger when he went back. It was a good plan, and Dave was confident he could pull it off without any trouble. That was sort of the problem. the stakes are pretty dang high he thought to himself, but i own at this game. there's not really any challenge lohac can dish out that an unlimited supply of daves couldnt achieve.

But of course, the turntables were not creating time clones. If he tried to exploit them to create overwhelming advantages, he'd have to live through being everywhere at once. And it was really, really boring.

And his day wasnt getting better. He sighed and tapped his iShades, going off ominous glow screensaver mode and into Pesterchum client mode.

TG: okay i'm at a bridge
TG: i need you to do your scrying thing or whatever
TG: so i know this piece of shit is not going to drop me in the lava
TT: Is the bridge made out of long sheets of interlocking metal?
TG: what
TG: yeah basically
TG: that was fast, are you ready to start dealing out drive thru palm readings
TT: You've already crossed that bridge.
TT: About two hours ago.
TG: well that's retarded
TG: why would i come back here when i'm already crossing it now
TG: that just makes things even more complicated for no reason
TG: did i say what went wrong the first time i crossed it
TT: You told me to remind you that that information wouldn't be helpful, and would just make the whole situation more idiotic, and that you should feel stupid for asking.
TG: why is future me always such a dick
TG: i think this might be indicative of an actual problem
TG: where i piss myself off in the past only to make me embittered and feel more entitled to be an asshole, and thus take it out on my past self in the first place
TG: it's like an endless cycle of autotrolling, with all steps of my relationship with myself being broadcast through you in no particular order
TT: Well, aren't you opening up all of the sudden. This insightful, sensitive side of you is rather refreshing. I think we're making great progress, Mr Strider.
TG: i've become less intimidated by your psychobabblery since it came out that you were a batshit crazy cat lady
TT: Mmm, but at least you've finally come to terms with being intimidated by my, as you say, "psychobablery" in the first place
TG: i wonder if any other kid in this session has as many cats in the fire as you do
TG: i doubt it
TT: That's inappropriate. Also, too soon.
TG: lighten up jaspers is fine
TG: he is the bruce-lee-in-an-eldritch-princess-dress of sentient lolcatsprites
TG: he can handle some underwater city ruins
TT: Some what?
TG: uh nothing
TG: forget i said it
TT: Are you telling me that's where Jaspers has disappeared to? In some underwater city?
TG: you know what, you figure this all out on your own with more than enough time to save him so let's just drop it and let things run their course
TT: I suppose it's only fair turnabout, since I'm not going to tell you what's on the other side of the bridge.
TG: what really
TG: weeeeeeeeak
TT: You know the drill: Future Yous get veto power. Just suck it up, you're going to go on to do it to yourself so it doesnt really matter how you feel about it now.
TG: i spy: something weak
TG: do you know what it is rose
TG: it is you and future me
TG: being in cahoots
TG: friggin cahoots
TT: You certainly do seem to be saying cahoots.
TG: also the support structure of this bridge is another thing that looks weak
TG: if i fall in lava because of future me, i'm going to just not become him so he never exists
TG: that'll show him
TT: Okay, move on already, I think standing near the lava chasm is starting to make you lightheaded.
TT: Find an exhaust vent to cool down next, and try your best not to bump into yourself, unless you are supposed to, in which case yourself will probably bump into you.
TG: it's so straightforward i wonder why i bothered to ask.

On to (Part Two)...

**Tenebrais** · 08-04-2010, 10:15 PM

A nice little examination of time travel mechanics there. I like it.

**reclusiveAmateur** · 08-04-2010, 11:58 PM

Part One? YESSSSSS

Seriously,

That is awesome.

(...okay yes I still like the kids more than the trolls >_> or I like the trolls just fine, they just don't really... inspire me)

**Cathartes** · 08-05-2010, 12:26 AM

I'm currently working on a troll fic. I should have it finished in a couple days.

**OracleEngineer** · 08-05-2010, 12:39 AM

Sollux/Karkat is cute and all, but my OTP is still...

**reclusiveAmateur** · 08-05-2010, 12:57 AM

I just caught up on breccia's fic, and holy crap

I was fond of karkat/sollux already, and damn, that was awesome!

I've been trying to work on a paper all day, so here's a fic I was trying to finish for the anniversary. >_> It's an extended version of something I came up with while I was giving the song meme another whirl-- if I start again and get a full set of songs, I'll probably end up posting that, too.

Dave/Jade, indeterminate future. Don't ask me exactly what's going on XD

**nextian** · 08-05-2010, 02:02 AM

Oh. My. God.

rA, fuck yes. I hope this is how it ends. That's like fixit fic for all the stories-where-they-have-to-forget of my childhood, except with more stoner DJing. AND I LOVE IT.

**northernVehemence** · 08-05-2010, 02:05 AM

Originally Posted by reclusiveAmateur

I just caught up on breccia's fic, and holy crap

I was fond of karkat/sollux already, and damn, that was awesome!

I've been trying to work on a paper all day, so here's a fic I was trying to finish for the anniversary. >_> It's an extended version of something I came up with while I was giving the song meme another whirl-- if I start again and get a full set of songs, I'll probably end up posting that, too.

Dave/Jade, indeterminate future. Don't ask me exactly what's going on XD

Holy shit. usually the kids don't really interest me, but this was amazing. Your writing flows very smoothly, and I was really impressed with how you were able to maintain the second person all the way through and not have it feel awkward. I don't personally go for Dave/Jade, but that story made me reconsider. I don't know if you're planning on writing more, but I hope you are! I'd love to see a John/Rose one.

Sushi Database, that was really cool! You stayed in character really well. Dave's kind of a hard guy to write for, but I think you really nailed it. Can't wait for part II!

**foxesforsale** · 08-05-2010, 05:45 AM

@rA: HELL YES! That was fantastic!

@nV: I loved that, can't wait for the epilogue

@breccia: Omg yes, more writing for my OTP! AND SUCH GREAT WRITING TOO ASDFLHGL: I hope you don't mind if I fangirl you for a while now :3

**breccia** · 08-05-2010, 07:48 AM

thanks for the comments all, you make me want to never stop writing

@tenebrais: i wasn't sure what to do with CA, so that's why he's out. CC is easy to understand and her quirks are cute; she seems like the type who wouldn't mind talking to anyone, regardless of blood color. I'm not sure that CA would even think about talking to CG, but who knows. ANDREW I AWAIT THIS IMPORTANT REVELATION, IT IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR MAKING YOUR CHARACTERS GAY.

@reclusiveAmateur: YES. Why haven't I considered the Older Dave As A DJ implications yet?!? That was awesome.

**sarasvati** · 08-05-2010, 10:08 AM

Late fic thread birthday gushing: You guys are so amazing! Seriously, this fandom is beyond wonderful, which actually means a lot. I mentioned it in the fandom secrets thread ages ago, but the fandom--and specifically this thread--is what got me writing again. Since I joined, I've had nothing but ideas just kind of leaking out everywhere, and churned out somewhere in the ballpark of 22,000 words of Homestuck fic (both published and in progress). That's not a lot for some writers, but for me, it easily exceeds basically everything else I've ever written combined. So if it's not too cheesy: YOU GUYS ARE MY INSPIRATION. Keep being awesome. <3

There was an assload of really great stuff posted over the last couple pages and I wish I had the time to comment on everything. RA, I do have to say: fuck yes, you manage to hit my buttons every single time. So. Good. (Also I'm going to have to scrap one of my drabbles because it was literally the exact same idea as your last fic, only YOU DID IT BETTER. SO JEALOUS.)

I am incredibly late with this! I wanted to finish it for the huge fic-posting birthday party, but I got stuck, and then I got busy, and then I got more stuck, augh. HUGE thanks to DocBeard and Tezrial for looking it over for me.

(1 . 2 . )

the path was closed, chapter two.
it'll never be the same, she says.

**Metaflare** · 08-05-2010, 10:23 AM

Sarasvati, Personastuck is one of the bestest thing's I've read yet.

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