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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Isn't it supposed to be "my ears hear evil's every sound"? It better fits the meter.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    I second that motion.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Quote Originally Posted by Kawa View Post
    Isn't it supposed to be "my ears hear evil's every sound"? It better fits the meter.
    Right. Fixed.

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    @Dehgan and AC: that was fantastic. That's really all there is to say on the matter.

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    @linguisticDoctor: JUST AS PLANNED. Though this makes me think maybe my sig should be IN ALL CAPS AND GRAY.

    @Dehgan: Oh my gosh, that was lovely also now I ship it thanks



    dammit I want this to be canon.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Quote Originally Posted by Dehgan View Post
    Gentlemen!

    I have created...THIS THING!



    I just sort of got the idea and ran with it.

    arcaneCalligramancer was kind enough to edit it for me and help me out with the narrative flow, so I guess this is a team victory or something.

    Anyway, if you guys like it I guess I will write more about this alternate reality thing I have here.
    Wow... I don't know how to react to that... but I like it.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Cruelest of Tyrants

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    HERE IS A THING. I hope you like it.

    Vindicatrix
    Part One



    A/N

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    kass

    if you write part two I will personally raise a daughter as a virgin and sacrifice her on an altar to your fic

    again

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    @Nox- this was very interesting! I'm not sure how much of it I would espouse myself, but I really enjoy that you've tried to humanize Vriska just a little, while keeping her arrogant, flippant, cruel persona intact. This was a very nice examination.

    @Kass- very nice. You have some very evocative turns of phrases in here. Eridan's youth is staggering, and it's something that I think we all tend to forget about in this comic. As a linguistics note, and not a bad one, only a neutral one, your British-English came through pretty strong in here. I thought it was a neat little touch, very reflective of the author.

    Now, for a fic!

    An examination of Gamzee's name, and how it should have been a warning from the start. (Because I speak Arabic, and it was too good to pass up.)

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Lookin good Kass! I'd like to see the next part for sure.
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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    First of all, incredibly belated thanks to everybody who read my fic (way back on page 70-something!) and enjoyed it! That was a very pleasant surprise.

    Second, feedback!

    Quote Originally Posted by Dehgan View Post
    Gentlemen!

    I have created...THIS THING!

    This is lovely, and you should feel lovely. I love vampire stories where the characters aren't SUBSUUUUMED BY LUST FOR BLOOOOOD because that gets kinda old. And Kanaya plays the part perfectly.
    That final line literally made me laugh out loud.





    Quote Originally Posted by Kassiopeia View Post
    HERE IS A THING. I hope you like it.

    Vindicatrix
    Part One

    I do like it! Anything featuring DadScratch is enjoyable, and seeing Eridan reduced to a sniveling nearly-repentant mess is very satisfying.

    Third, I am writing more! It's partially complete! Expect more soonish.
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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    @Kass: OMNOMNOM KASSFIC. First, I think your portrayal of Scratch here is far less sappy than some other Daddy!Scratch fics that I've seen (which have left me going a bit :\ because while cute, I don't see him as very nice, and... yeah). As usual, your Jack is terrifying and perfect, and I thought your work with Eridan here was great, showing his vulnerable side. Man, all the fanwork around here is almost making me like him again, despite his dickery.

    @Sionnan - Sorry I haven't been commenting on your fic as much lately first of all, I've been SUPER FUCKING BUSY (and I am now, actually... procrastinating like all hell). Second, this is quite interesting and I've liked all your Gamezee stuff so far, the way you look into the linguistic puzzles surrounding his name and theme (and god knows I'm a sucker for linguistics)
    ...
    I wish I could remember more Arabic than the word kitab though.

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    @Dehgan: OH PLEASE OH PLEASE OH PLEASE I absolutely ADORE KarkatKanaya, it is my favorite moirail pair, and this was perfect.

    @Kass: ...I'm sorry, I think I cried a little. I love Dad Scratch. That is...oh wonderful. I'll probably never write the pairings/characters/whatever I like most, because I've got too much love for Dad Scratch and minor characters/relationships that take over my brain and you showed just exactly right. He was Dad Scratch, but he was still Doc Scratch at the same time, and THAT is the most important part. And Jack Noir was utterly TERRIFYING, in his usual Jack Noir way.

    tl;dr awesome

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    ...no one ever comments on my writing...
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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Quote Originally Posted by Nox View Post
    ...no one ever comments on my writing...
    Quote Originally Posted by Sionnan View Post
    @Nox- this was very interesting! I'm not sure how much of it I would espouse myself, but I really enjoy that you've tried to humanize Vriska just a little, while keeping her arrogant, flippant, cruel persona intact. This was a very nice examination.
    I was angry with my friend. I told my wrath. My wrath did end.
    I was angry with my foe. I told it not. My wrath did grow.

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    @Nox
    For one, Sionnan did.

    For two, we have gone over this before with Dermonster.
    Do we really need to explain as to why and how not everyone comments on everything?

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Quote Originally Posted by Nox View Post
    ...no one ever comments on my writing...
    All right, if you want.

    It wasn't bad, by any means. The grammar and sentence structure are better than most, and the voice stays constant throughout. But if you were trying to do character exploration, I don't feel like you've succeeded. Your fic doesn't tell me anything about Vriska I don't feel like I already know.

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    @Nox: The story and idea was good. The grammar... less good. You used their where you meant there almost every time, and at least several times used your instead of you're. That's one of the things that bothers me the most.

    Also, as a character exploration, it was basically the same thing everyone says about Vriska, if they like her. Maybe it was a more interesting look at how she viewed Tavros, but, again, not very original.
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    Ah, now I feel like a total jerk for that one post. Sorry.

    Guess I need to learn patience. I'll do better in the future.
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    Its alright Nox.
    If someone doesn't comment, take it as
    "Next time I ought to do better!"
    Take it as motivation, not disappointment.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    tee hee, thanks guys. I am so looking forward to doing the next bit. Maybe even tonight if I decide the world can probably survive another day without my staggeringly unoriginal analysis of Ulysses.

    @Sionnan - Cheers! I'm amused (in a good way! bluh bluh something of a patriot) you think I'm British-sounding - I normally try for neutral, but I imagine it doesn't matter toooo much with characters like Scratch who don't really have a nationality. I wonder what made you think that specifically? I mean, if anything in particular. Your Gamzee fic is great, incidentally. Exploring the duality of his character = always good in my book.

    @Decker - thanks man! I'm sorry I forgot to comment on your thing earlier - I liked it. Can't resist anything with Jack, and your take on Aradia is pretty nice. If anything I would say maybe working on something extended is the way to go now? Your dialogue is fine, but developing some scenes/plots might test your writing a bit.

    @Seraph - aha thanks bro. I am finding myself... strangely fond of Eridan also o_o I mean, I still want him to die, but reading/writing fanwork is softening me up (also, any opportunity to mine a situation for all the angst it's worth = catnip to me).

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Hi guys! I've never really said anything on this thread, but rest assured I lurk here like the biggest creeper! (SSSSSSSS) But uh, I thought it'd be nice if I would just contribute something.

    It's really really super duper short and it can hardly be called a drabble, but I was feeling sad about Tav, soooo. And chances are this will be like completely pointless or something, but it was worth a post, I guess! You could call this a character study, I suppose, if you wanted to define it. Also the ending is sort of a abrupt, but eh.


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    I am made of flattery and glee in equal parts. So is lil' bro but he is far too easily distracted to post.

    Thus, I am taking all of the credit. All of it.

    (I don't know why he asked if he ought to write more in this little AU, it's not as if I'm going to give him a choice.)

    edit: deceitfulDarj - I like it! It's a neat little view of Tavros.

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    Re: MSPA Fanfiction IV

    Quote Originally Posted by Kassiopeia View Post
    @Decker - thanks man! I'm sorry I forgot to comment on your thing earlier - I liked it. Can't resist anything with Jack, and your take on Aradia is pretty nice. If anything I would say maybe working on something extended is the way to go now? Your dialogue is fine, but developing some scenes/plots might test your writing a bit.
    Thank you.
    I am working on something extended believe it or not, but for the Valentines day exchange. I'm not done yet with the one I'm working on, and I believe that it's already longer than anything I've written so far.

    Which isn't saying much admittedly. I think my longest fic is still Tenth Life, clocking in at 2,211 words.
    I was angry with my friend. I told my wrath. My wrath did end.
    I was angry with my foe. I told it not. My wrath did grow.

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