MSPA Fanfiction VI: Trashy Rainbow Drinker Fanfiction

**crash826** · 03-28-2011, 04:23 PM

@lantadyme

...fffffffff
why are you so good
it's giving me an inferiority complex
like
look at that guy
look at how much better he writes than me

**SkaianRedeemer** · 03-28-2011, 05:34 PM

Oh my, you did it and every bit of it is wonderful. Following Nepeta's reactions to everyone else was a great way to see it. The way she holds herself as intended near Kanaya, slips off into her normal personality the minute she's with Equius, where she's comfortable, and Karkat where she'd like to be. And how she talks to Terezi like the long-distance friends they are, how she's furious at Vriska and discovers the joy of Eridan in under fifteen seconds. I wonder where Kanaya got off to in those last few scenes? Anyway, I would love to read more of this, if you have any more, and if you don't this is still a good ending for it!

**lantadyme** · 03-28-2011, 06:35 PM

@crash: Pff, are you crazy, dude? Everyone in this thread is excellent at writing. I honestly don't know why you guys put up with my lame science fiction prose when you could have wily or sarasvati spouting gold at you instead, but I am still very flattered. <3

@Skaian: This was stupidly fun to write and I seriously have to thank you for that pesterlog inspiration. XD I have no idea why I was intimidated by writing Nepeta before. She is too adorable. Kanaya was probably making sure Vriska wasn't making any more of an idiot of herself. This is all I have, but I'm glad you enjoyed it (and if you want to write more yourself, by all means).

**anonymousComrade** · 03-28-2011, 08:21 PM

@lantadyme: you are making it difficult for average joes like me

how are we supposed to follow after you post something

it is unfair, I tell you

**wilySubversionist** · 03-28-2011, 08:22 PM

Originally Posted by lantadyme

They Don't Care

This was incredible. I love the idea of fancy troll parties, you nailed the whole tomboy-dress up feeling and Nepeta was adorable. We're those shades of Karkat

Nepeta reciprocity? Awesome.

Originally Posted by lantadyme

@crash: I honestly don't know why you guys put up with my lame science fiction prose when you could have wily or sarasvati spouting gold at you instead, but I am still very flattered.

Listen, you! You're great! Don't make us drag you into the Self-Esteem-Boosting Writing Admiration Circle of Death Battle Royale Duel of the Century. Seriously, this is an mindbogglingly talented group, here.

**crash826** · 03-28-2011, 08:56 PM

This resulted from some genchat hijinx

Original Version (by inexpediency)

Slightly Altered Version: by crash826, edited from inexpediency's

From here

**pimudragonfeline** · 03-28-2011, 09:17 PM

I

Wicked reference. Karkat would make a good Elphaba.

**SkaianRedeemer** · 03-29-2011, 12:47 AM

@lantadyme: I'll see if I can come up with anything, you never know!

**Nox** · 03-29-2011, 01:25 AM

How Little They Notice

It’s amazing…how little they notice.

I think it’s part of the game program. Yes, it applies to the players as much as to the constructs. In truth, the players ARE constructs as well. Yet both they, their guardians, and normal beings that observe them never seem to notice. Like some obvious fact is missed because it’s so obvious. I wonder if it would hit them if someone other then myself pointed it out...I doubt it. Such truths are what we naturally shy away from.

What am I speaking of you ask? Well, as an outside observer I see things about both players and guardians that no one else ever does. Though they don’t seem to comprehend it, normal humans do not have a Sylladex to carry items in. In fact, you could check the entire world and never find anyone with one. Yet players have them, and talk about them with other players like it was nothing at all. They even have books explaining such things, but can never recall how they got them.

Normal kids can’t level up. A normal girl can’t kill an ogre by jumping on it, ramming knitting needles into it’s eyes, and riding it down into the water...nor a normal girl have the bravery and lack of empathy to do so on the first try. Perfectly white skin doesn’t exist in nature. Nor does red eyes, or pure white hair. The guardians are no different. They too are ALMOST human, but not quite. They all seem too blank, too one-dimensional. Like something was missing.

The truth is as simple as it is horrifying. They don’t look quite human because they are NOT human. Rather, they are constructs shaped in the likeness of humanity. Fledgling gods sown among mortals, awaiting their trial. It is the same thing among trolls. No troll has skin that light shade of gray, or horns that color. Yet no one ever noticed.

I think that when they stand before me...and I know they will, destiny has a way of doing such things...I will tell them. Tell them that the race they think the represent died out with their worlds. Tell them how unusual it is that they brushed off the death of their entire race, almost as if they were not connected to it in any way. Tell them that they are already well on their way to being as monstrous as I am, because it’s coded into them.

The only thing I haven’t decided...is if I’ll let them finish gaping in horror at the truth before I butcher them.

**Mirdan** · 03-29-2011, 02:26 AM

Originally Posted by Nox

How Little They Notice

It’s amazing…how little they notice.

I think it’s part of the game program. Yes, it applies to the players as much as to the constructs. In truth, the players ARE constructs as well. Yet both they, their guardians, and normal beings that observe them never seem to notice. Like some obvious fact is missed because it’s so obvious. I wonder if it would hit them if someone other then myself pointed it out...I doubt it. Such truths are what we naturally shy away from.

What am I speaking of you ask? Well, as an outside observer I see things about both players and guardians that no one else ever does. Though they don’t seem to comprehend it, normal humans do not have a Sylladex to carry items in. In fact, you could check the entire world and never find anyone with one. Yet players have them, and talk about them with other players like it was nothing at all. They even have books explaining such things, but can never recall how they got them.

Normal kids can’t level up. A normal girl can’t kill an ogre by jumping on it, ramming knitting needles into it’s eyes, and riding it down into the water...nor a normal girl have the bravery and lack of empathy to do so on the first try. Perfectly white skin doesn’t exist in nature. Nor does red eyes, or pure white hair. The guardians are no different. They too are ALMOST human, but not quite. They all seem too blank, too one-dimensional. Like something was missing.

The truth is as simple as it is horrifying. They don’t look quite human because they are NOT human. Rather, they are constructs shaped in the likeness of humanity. Fledgling gods sown among mortals, awaiting their trial. It is the same thing among trolls. No troll has skin that light shade of gray, or horns that color. Yet no one ever noticed.

I think that when they stand before me...and I know they will, destiny has a way of doing such things...I will tell them. Tell them that the race they think the represent died out with their worlds. Tell them how unusual it is that they brushed off the death of their entire race, almost as if they were not connected to it in any way. Tell them that they are already well on their way to being as monstrous as I am, because it’s coded into them.

The only thing I haven’t decided...is if I’ll let them finish gaping in horror at the truth before I butcher them.

And I was going to get some sleep tonight, too. Silly me.

I like the idea (though I think we've seen a few people who aren't constructs that look and act like constructs) because on the one hand this is what lovecraftian horrors are, merciless and conniving, but on the other hand I don't interpret the kids as really "[brushing] off the death of their entire race" (John still talks about his actors in the present tense!) so it's a very different picture than what my headcanon is.

Don't take me wrong, I still hate you because I'm already sleep deprived.

**Jim Groovester** · 03-29-2011, 04:32 AM

FINALLY I plowed through my writer's block.

The Sapphire of Alternia, Part 19

**anonymousComrade** · 03-29-2011, 05:14 AM

@Jim: this was actually pretty good, I thought

Also the idea that Problem Sleuth might have been Eridan's exile is pretty funny

**Path** · 03-29-2011, 07:25 AM

I cannot argue with anything that has Problem Sleuth and Spades Slick holding each other's hats, and making a tense grim trade-off. Watch out, Jim, you're just making room for more of my stuff. :P

**Graven_Image** · 03-29-2011, 08:08 AM

Originally Posted by Nox

How Little They Notice

It’s amazing…how little they notice.

I think it’s part of the game program. Yes, it applies to the players as much as to the constructs. In truth, the players ARE constructs as well. Yet both they, their guardians, and normal beings that observe them never seem to notice. Like some obvious fact is missed because it’s so obvious. I wonder if it would hit them if someone other then myself pointed it out...I doubt it. Such truths are what we naturally shy away from.

What am I speaking of you ask? Well, as an outside observer I see things about both players and guardians that no one else ever does. Though they don’t seem to comprehend it, normal humans do not have a Sylladex to carry items in. In fact, you could check the entire world and never find anyone with one. Yet players have them, and talk about them with other players like it was nothing at all. They even have books explaining such things, but can never recall how they got them.

Normal kids can’t level up. A normal girl can’t kill an ogre by jumping on it, ramming knitting needles into it’s eyes, and riding it down into the water...nor a normal girl have the bravery and lack of empathy to do so on the first try. Perfectly white skin doesn’t exist in nature. Nor does red eyes, or pure white hair. The guardians are no different. They too are ALMOST human, but not quite. They all seem too blank, too one-dimensional. Like something was missing.

The truth is as simple as it is horrifying. They don’t look quite human because they are NOT human. Rather, they are constructs shaped in the likeness of humanity. Fledgling gods sown among mortals, awaiting their trial. It is the same thing among trolls. No troll has skin that light shade of gray, or horns that color. Yet no one ever noticed.

I think that when they stand before me...and I know they will, destiny has a way of doing such things...I will tell them. Tell them that the race they think the represent died out with their worlds. Tell them how unusual it is that they brushed off the death of their entire race, almost as if they were not connected to it in any way. Tell them that they are already well on their way to being as monstrous as I am, because it’s coded into them.

The only thing I haven’t decided...is if I’ll let them finish gaping in horror at the truth before I butcher them.

I had that idea in the IDE thread. Everyone said I was nuts.

Originally Posted by Jim Groovester

FINALLY I plowed through my writer's block.

The Sapphire of Alternia, Part 19

I like this, mang. Glad to see you're back to writing.

**battlerek** · 03-29-2011, 08:58 AM

Blarg, so many stuff to comment, so little time.

@Nox- Always love some existential horror, and that was as horrific as it gets.

@Jim- Glad to see you back on the hardboiled writing train. Slick and Sleuth's exchange was the best.

**ProspitDreamer** · 03-29-2011, 10:33 AM

@lantadyme- I got to go to a troll party! As Nepeta! Oh my gosh this was so fun! The way she reacts to each of the other trolls was so pure and adorable; but the adoration Equius has of her and the unabashed way he shows his love is the best part.

forever!

@crash826- I do believe I just read a poem with a Greek chorus in it. That was so awesomly cool. Plus I love the idea of Jade

- Karkat (or whatever the kismeses symbol is. Why on earth aren't the four suits of cards smiliy choices?) Anyway that was pretty unique and creative, kudos.

**lantadyme** · 03-29-2011, 01:36 PM

Originally Posted by Nox

How Little They Notice

It’s amazing…how little they notice.

I think it’s part of the game program. Yes, it applies to the players as much as to the constructs. In truth, the players ARE constructs as well. Yet both they, their guardians, and normal beings that observe them never seem to notice. Like some obvious fact is missed because it’s so obvious. I wonder if it would hit them if someone other then myself pointed it out...I doubt it. Such truths are what we naturally shy away from.

What am I speaking of you ask? Well, as an outside observer I see things about both players and guardians that no one else ever does. Though they don’t seem to comprehend it, normal humans do not have a Sylladex to carry items in. In fact, you could check the entire world and never find anyone with one. Yet players have them, and talk about them with other players like it was nothing at all. They even have books explaining such things, but can never recall how they got them.

Normal kids can’t level up. A normal girl can’t kill an ogre by jumping on it, ramming knitting needles into it’s eyes, and riding it down into the water...nor a normal girl have the bravery and lack of empathy to do so on the first try. Perfectly white skin doesn’t exist in nature. Nor does red eyes, or pure white hair. The guardians are no different. They too are ALMOST human, but not quite. They all seem too blank, too one-dimensional. Like something was missing.

The truth is as simple as it is horrifying. They don’t look quite human because they are NOT human. Rather, they are constructs shaped in the likeness of humanity. Fledgling gods sown among mortals, awaiting their trial. It is the same thing among trolls. No troll has skin that light shade of gray, or horns that color. Yet no one ever noticed.

I think that when they stand before me...and I know they will, destiny has a way of doing such things...I will tell them. Tell them that the race they think the represent died out with their worlds. Tell them how unusual it is that they brushed off the death of their entire race, almost as if they were not connected to it in any way. Tell them that they are already well on their way to being as monstrous as I am, because it’s coded into them.

The only thing I haven’t decided...is if I’ll let them finish gaping in horror at the truth before I butcher them.

Oh wow, this is pretty awesome.

**crash826** · 03-29-2011, 02:15 PM

Originally Posted by ProspitDreamer

@crash826- I do believe I just read a poem with a Greek chorus in it. That was so awesomly cool. Plus I love the idea of Jade

- Karkat (or whatever the kismeses symbol is. Why on earth aren't the four suits of cards smiliy choices?) Anyway that was pretty unique and creative, kudos.

It's actually based off a song from the musical Wicked.

**Graven_Image** · 03-29-2011, 02:16 PM

Alternate Victory Condition

**Megafire** · 03-29-2011, 02:24 PM

First attempt at a song-fic, I suppose, and based on a Dutch band's song, too.

Original song.

**anonymousComrade** · 03-29-2011, 04:13 PM

So I've been kind of wanting to expand on something I wrote earlier

And that's getting underway now, here's hoping I come up with enough to continue it

Re: Champion - Prologue

Notes:

**PingZing** · 03-29-2011, 05:59 PM

Originally Posted by anonymousComrade

So I've been kind of wanting to expand on something I wrote earlier

And that's getting underway now, here's hoping I come up with enough to continue it

Re: Champion - Prologue

Notes:

Augh. I read Karkatcestor thing you posted before. I thought it then, and I'm thinking it even more now:

you're doing everything I want to do and doing it better

(don't stop)

**Jim Groovester** · 03-29-2011, 07:05 PM

Is this thread big enough for two Karkat ancestor fics? I hope so. I'm liking both of them.

@battlerek & Graven_Image & Path: Thanks. Hopefully it won't take ten days for the next part.

@anonymousComrade: No, PS isn't Eridan's exile. He just knows Eridan by reputation from his time as a Prospit soldier.

Oh, and my first though when I read the scene with Karkancestor and the recruiter was of the scene in Starship Troopers where Johnny Rico signs up.

"What about you, kid?"

"Threshecutioners, sir."

"Well, good for you. The threshecutioners made me the man I am today." The recruiter pushes back from his desk, revealing two legs missing from the knee down.

**anonymousComrade** · 03-29-2011, 07:33 PM

Originally Posted by Jim Groovester

@anonymousComrade: No, PS isn't Eridan's exile. He just knows Eridan by reputation from his time as a Prospit soldier.

Oh, and my first though when I read the scene with Karkancestor and the recruiter was of the scene in Starship Troopers where Johnny Rico signs up.

"What about you, kid?"

"Threshecutioners, sir."

"Well, good for you. The threshecutioners made me the man I am today." The recruiter pushes back from his desk, revealing two legs missing from the knee down.

Theories shot down: 1/??
Opportunities for references missed: 1/??

But that's okay, the idea that Eridan had a reputation among Prospit's soliders for being dumb is still hilarious

**Path** · 03-29-2011, 08:17 PM

Okay, I held off reading what I knew was going to be a Wicked rewrite because I was afraid it wouldn't hold up to how awesome the original is. I was wrong, and it was fantastic. Wicked is the best thing.

That being said, in my head I'm flipping a few lines just so I can get the image of Jade rolling her eyes at Karkat's yelling and Karkat deriding Jade's anime dress:

Originally Posted by crash826

BOTH
Loathing!
Unadulterated loathing!

KARKAT
FOR YOUR FACE...

JADE
your voice...

KARKAT
YOUR CLOTHING...

BOTH
Let's just say - I loathe it all!

But I mean, the whole thing was great no matter what.

Originally Posted by Jim Groovester

@battlerek & Graven_Image & Path: Thanks. Hopefully it won't take ten days for the next part.

Was it really only ten days? It's hard to tell stuck in this never-ending cycle of cufflink making. What does sunlight look like? I can't remember. Anyhow I guess I'll be pleasantly surprised if Chapter 20 turns up sooner than I'd anticipate!

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