fantroll crit thread #1. THERE IS A NEW THREAD, PLEASE DON'T POST IN HERE ANY MORE.

[Teslamagnetic Integration]

=> Be the irritant

『You must not have many friends acting sour like that all the time!』

=> Just...be the yellowblood.

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Your name is INNISS GODELL, and you are a 7.8 sweeps old goldblood. You also don't know how to shut the fuck up when you're supposed to.

You tend to say whatever is on your mind, no matter the repercussions involved. You always tell the truth, because you think its just better to be brutally honest, than to be sweetly dishonest. In fact, your tone has a bright, yet utterly deadpan punchline on every sentence, make it seems like you're sarcastic when you're definitely not. Though you can be. Nothing's really stopping you.

Your lusus tends to worry about you all the time, worried you might get culled for saying the wrong things at the worst of times for the dumbest of reasons possible. You love your roachdad, no matter how much everyone else hates him. In fact, your roachdad is adorable; at least to you. You also protect him as much as possible, seeing as he's easily crushed by someone else. He'll survive no matter what, that you're certain, you just don't want him in pain.

You have an obsession with both cooking, and FLARPing. In fact, you tend to try to mix the two a lot, which others would hate if you weren't such a brilliantly good cook. That's a lie. Actually, you're terrible at cooking. Nobody likes it. In fact, nobody likes you at FLARPing, because you're the weakest, and you just plain lose every single time. It's because of this that you tend to have virtually nothing but the clothes on your back. You tend to collect clothing left lying around for some reason, and it's become a hobby. You don't know why, really.

That is to say, you aren't defenseless when shit hits the fan. You have a wonderful, yet completely and utterly hopeless power beyond all comprehension. You only sustain a mere fraction of damage inflicted upon you, no matter the source. A well rounded punch in the face would only hurt you like someone lightly slapping you. Of course, this would be utterly perfect, if it didn't both kill your sense of pain tolerance and nerves to a dulled point, and didn't make your reflexes disgustingly bad. Your power protects you, but that the same time, makes you utterly powerless. If your power were compared to theirs, it would be minus below average. You tend to balance this by fleeing. You're almost too good at retreating from enemies. It's how you've survived all this time, even. Though, you do sometimes get lucky and kill a few trolls. But that's life, isn't it?

Your strife specibus is the fncysntaKind, and your fetch modus is the FICTION GLOSSARY. You must allocate each item in its corresponding genre of fiction.

Your trolltag is bracketedCandor, and you 『talk within the pure honesty you have towards everyone!』

[DigitalBlasphemy]

*reads roachdad lusus*

SQUICK! Oh god, yuck.

Other than that, interesting troll, I like him a lot! He sounds like he would be a fun character. But, mind explaining his strife specibus? I've really never heard of such a thing before. Lastly, I know you said he has nothing but the clothes on his back. So he doesn't have a hive either? And what does he eat, seeing as he's incredibly poor?

[Teslamagnetic Integration]

Takes food and bolts for it, usually. But it isn't all too often, he's accustomed of being able to go a long time without eating.

His strife specibus is the fncysntaKind, or the "fancy santa" kind. He treats them like a bludgeoning weapon. Or well, he would. If he didn't usually lose.

He has a hive, it's just underground. Hidden away.

[bear]

Small world haha. His horns remind me of whale tails. c: And thank you! I actually didn't have that in mind, but now that you mention it...

[LordHyper]

Fan-troll concept:

Samiel Waltin
Age: The equivalent of 20 in Sweeps
Gender: Male
Lusus: Kangaroo
Blood: Brown
Strife Specibus: Gunkind
Fetch Modus: Wallet

In his younger years, Samiel ran a PLOT-DEVICE STORE (a highly popular store for FLARPers) with his KANGAROO LUSUS. The store was more successful than he thought it would be, so he ended up buying another store. Then another, then another...

Basically, Samiel ended up creating the troll version of WAL-MART.

Samiel is STRATEGIC and thinks of WELL THOUGHT OUT ideas. As a lowblood, he's pretty rich and lives in a BLUE-BLOOD SCALE HIVE. However, with his success came many problems. Mainly, daily assassination attempts from local STORE OWNERS and JEALOUS LOWBLOODS. As a result, he became PARANOID and refuses to step outside of his hive without the company of his kangaroo lusus. He never goes anywhere without his lusus and is usually seen in public RIDING in her pouch. Whenever a stranger would go near him, he would point a gun at them, that is, if his lusus hadn't beaten the crap out of them already. Although he's old enough to leave ALTERNIA, he regularly pays off the higher-ups to let him stay. He's too scared of getting into actual fights, let alone GALACTIC CONQUEST.

Samiel gained a fondness for PACKAGED AND PRESERVED FOODS, as the chances of it being poisoned would be very low. He creates FLARP CAMPAIGNS to entertain young trolls buying equipment at his store. However, some trolls are disappointed that some of his campaigns don't feature much fighting, which stems from Samiel's constant FEAR AND PARANOIA.

As you may expect, he has no SOCIAL LIFE. Most of his friends tend to be his BEST CUSTOMERS. Except for MOIRAILLEGENCE, he does not pursue relationships, as most of his options on ALTERNIA are young trolls. And having a relationship with them would be weird. As such, he also bribes the IMPERIAL DRONES.

[Monkeysky]

Fan-troll concept:

Samiel Waltin
Age: The equivalent of 20 in Sweeps
Gender: Male
Lusus: Kangaroo
Blood: Brown
Strife Specibus: Gunkind
Fetch Modus: Wallet

In his younger years, Samiel ran a PLOT-DEVICE STORE (a highly popular store for FLARPers) with his KANGAROO LUSUS. The store was more successful than he thought it would be, so he ended up buying another store. Then another, then another...

Basically, Samiel ended up creating the troll version of WAL-MART.

Samiel is STRATEGIC and thinks of WELL THOUGHT OUT ideas. As a lowblood, he's pretty rich and lives in a BLUE-BLOOD SCALE HIVE. However, with his success came many problems. Mainly, daily assassination attempts from local STORE OWNERS and JEALOUS LOWBLOODS. As a result, he became PARANOID and refuses to step outside of his hive without the company of his kangaroo lusus. He never goes anywhere without his lusus and is usually seen in public RIDING in her pouch. Whenever a stranger would go near him, he would point a gun at them, that is, if his lusus hadn't beaten the crap out of them already. Although he's old enough to leave ALTERNIA, he regularly pays off the higher-ups to let him stay. He's too scared of getting into actual fights, let alone GALACTIC CONQUEST.

Samiel gained a fondness for PACKAGED AND PRESERVED FOODS, as the chances of it being poisoned would be very low. He creates FLARP CAMPAIGNS to entertain young trolls buying equipment at his store. However, some trolls are disappointed that some of his campaigns don't feature much fighting, which stems from Samiel's constant FEAR AND PARANOIA.

As you may expect, he has no SOCIAL LIFE. Most of his friends tend to be his BEST CUSTOMERS. Except for MOIRAILLEGENCE, he does not pursue relationships, as most of his options on ALTERNIA are young trolls. And having a relationship with them would be weird. As such, he also bribes the IMPERIAL DRONES.

A. What is his symbol?
B. What are the plot devices he sells?
C. You can't bribe drones. By definition, a drone cannot be bribed.

[Monkeysky]

Small world haha. His horns remind me of whale tails. c: And thank you! I actually didn't have that in mind, but now that you mention it...

Yeah, I try to get the horns to match the symbol, either in form or theory.

Here's one of them, I guess.



Your name is CISELL SCEALU, and LIFE HAS BEEN GOOD TO YOU.

You live in a ROCK CLIFF HIVE, along with your kindly, but sadly crippled, ARMADILLO LUSUS. Since you emerged from the wriggling caves a bit more than SIX SWEEPS AGO, your lusus has amazed you with the stories of your heroes, the mighty SKULLPTORS. Ever since then, you have trained your strength in order to join their exclusive ranks. You are now quite skilled at the ability to CARVE STONE USING ONLY YOUR SKULL AND HORNS. Since this inevitably leads to large amounts of smashing, it has led to the incredible strengthening of your horns and skull, at the expense of a permanently lost tooth (the rest tend to grow back) and a lazy eye, which you have never had time to treat. You tend to spend your days TRAINING YOUR STRENGTH AND SKILL by breaking the boulders that fall from the rock cliff, and CARVING YOUR MASTERPIECE, an enormous stone relief surrounding your hive, displaying the history of the skullpting movement. You hope that the completion of this project will allow you acceptance into their society. When you are too tired or injured to do either of these, you spend your time CARING FOR YOUR LUSUS, and APPLYING FOR SUPPLY GRANTS from the emperor-to-be's official assistant. In exchange, you often provide skullptures for her or the emperor.
You hold the hemospectrum in very high regard, but you don't believe that it should be abused in the way that many high-bloods do. You are friends with a few low-bloods, and you are often uncomfortable with the way the assistant treats those beneath her, yourself included, but you still believe that the lower serving the higher is the natural way, and that order can only be kept through this. You still keep courteous to members of all blood colors, but you tend to act more sternly towards those below you.
You use SKULLKIND abstractus. Your fetchmodus is SCULPTMODUS, in which you must mimic the shape of your desired item. If you were to enter SGRUB, you would be the KNIGHT OF SPACE, and you would live on THE LAND OF SPIRES AND FROGS, along with your consorts, MYSTERIOUS GREY MICE.

Your trolltag is artisticGranite, and you hafe a strange akkent, from your lost toof.

[BewareOfNerd]

Brown entrepeneur:
1. It is difficult for lowbloods to attain high status or wealth, even if they do have good ideas. If anything, they'd probably just put him in the army and ship him off to some hellhole planet that needs conquering.
2. I don't think a guy just out of his teen years is capable of owning and managing one store, let alone a chain.
3. He's an adult, so he's probably in the military, and definitely off-planet. Kids (which is to say the vast majority of fantrolls) are going to get weirded out talking to him.
4. What's his personality like? How does he treat his workers?

Blue fella:
1. Lusii don't talk. He'd probably find out about the skullptors by random chance/destiny/whatever.
2. Stone is stronger than bone and horn (and bashing your skull doesn't make it stronger), so his horns would be either smashed or worn down to nubs, and he'd be horribly brain-damaged from too many concussions.
3. Describe his personality in more detail.
4. Does he have any other interests?

[Marshmellow]

>SWITCH 5

>FLARP LOGIN acerbicAphidivorous ************

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Your name is TEATHA NIKNEJ, and those idiots are trying to rush the boss again aren't they.

You are a troll of SEVEN SOLAR SWEEPS, variously interested in gardening, astronomy, and of course, FLARP. At this very moment your party is attempting YET ANOTHER SUICIDAL MANEUVER, likely to end with a TOTAL PARTY KILL. Typical. It is now up to you, as the party's sole GRIMDARK SPELLSHAPER, to turn this around and save the group from TOTAL ANNIHILATION. Again.

With healing shovel in hand and targets in sight you will GO TO WORK, bashing your teammates in the face to transfer your BLACK HEALING ENERGIES directly into them. Oh sure it's an excruciatingly painful experience (for them) but also surprisingly CATHARTIC.

When not preventing the senseless deaths of your fellow party members, you try to lead a quiet and uneventful life in your HUMBLE HIVE ON THE HILLSIDE. Well it's more of an estate really but what do you expect an impressionable young grub to churn out when given the vast resources of a blue blood?

And make no mistake, your blood is of the PUREST BLUE HUE POSSIBLE, placing you firmly among the ranks of nobility. It is your DUTY, nay, PRIVILEGE, to uphold the hemospectrum and to hold yourself as a model to all trolls--a TROLLMODEL, you could say. Fortunately there are few visitors around these parts, so you can usually SLACK OFF most of the time in that regard.

But where were we? Ah yes, your HUMBLE HIVE ON THE HILLSIDE. The sprawling grounds are nearly covered entirely in lush plant life--partly because of your gardening hobby, and partly because your LADYBIRD LUSUS likes it that way. She is a fairly decent lusus, you think, provided the grounds are maintained, but she just doesn't quite GET you. It's the bug eating thing mostly. Maybe someday she'll understand that you're just not as enthusiastic about the nutritional value of various varieties of aphids as she is. But probably not.

Maintaining THE GARDENS is generally a pretty full time job, but you find time to enjoy other hobbies as well. Currently you think astronomy is PRETTY ENTHRALLING, and would probably be more than a passing interest if only you could actually identify any of the CELESTIAL PHENOMENA you read about. Your NAVIGATIONAL SKILLS are about as fine tuned as a sledgehammer--some days you even have trouble FINDING YOUR WAY AROUND THE HIVE. So really it comes as little surprise that the night sky is as incomprehensible to you as the glubs of the seadwellers.

You use the spadeKind specibus for your day-to-day murders, and find yourself often frustrated by your Loadscreen fetch modus. Online, you go by the trolltag acerbicAphidivorous and you prefer to keep things brief and to the point

Enough dawdling then. There are poor dumb wounded trolls in need of your healing touch.

*THWACK*

So it took me a little while to actually get around to writing this up.

[MugenSpammer]

Hey hey folks, I'm new to this forum and well I lurk a lot but this thread caught my interest. I'm pretty big into character design and development but I feel like I can do much, much better with all my characters. I made my first troll not to long ago and thought I'd share her with you guys. Now note that her bio and everything isn't quite Homestuck but you should get the idea of who she is.

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Name: Luxcia Rokcaw
Gender: Female
Species: Troll
Posters: Barbarians and Vikings
Primary Skill: Slaughtering and Pillaging.
Secondary Skill: Making flesh balls and sacks.
Psychic Power: Telekinetic Squishing
Hobby: Killing Lowbloods, Looting said killed Lowblood's respiteblocks.
Bedroom Theme: Tribal and Barbaric
Bedroom Appearance: Neat and well organized.
Defining Trait: Fur Clothing
Symbol: Spade

Chumhandle: viciousDelicious
Text Color: #461B7E
Mannerisms: talks quiet to bring people in before YELLING IN THEIR EARS!!

Sylladex Modus and Description: Blood Rage: Luxcia has 10 card slots numbering 0-9. The numbers represent the approximate amount of blood in which she must pour onto the ground, always some poor sap! Her 0 Slot is always available to use and is always slotted with Flesh Balls or Sacks which some poor unsuspecting Lowblood had been turned into. Flesh Balls/Sacks can be stacked. It takes a couple seconds after the blood stops flowing before it calculates the amount of blood spilled.

Notable items: Punk Axe, Claws You Later, Flesh Ballx10

Strife Specibus: Axekind, Clawkind

Bio: Luxcia Rokcaw, a troll of 8 sweeps, enjoys the fantastic activities of adult trolls such as MURDERING and PILLAGING. She finds nothing more enjoyable then finding some pitiful Lowblood wigglers to squish into FLESH BALLS or SACKS with her CRUSHING PSYCHIC POWER. Afterward she takes a good look over said deceased wiggler's respiteblock for anything worth PILLAGING from their cold, dead hands.

Luxcia has a variety of interests which include BARBARIAN and VIKING MOVIES like Trollnan the Barbarian featuring Arnold Trollzenegger and Beotrul, which deals with an egotistical troll that goes around being all badass on adventures. She likes to HUNT and SKIN Furbeasts to later turn into fashionable fur clothing akin to her favorite BARBARIAN and VIKINGS. She Also collects and stores all her FLESH BALLS and SACKS in specific chests in her room all labeled and ORGANIZED by blood color. Despite her barbaric ways she makes sure her room is prim and proper, she is a neat monster after all.

She lives in a Hut-like respite block with her humanoid Mushroom Lesus. The thing always manages to creep her out with it insistent hugs and vegetable type dishes it tries to force her to eat. Overall she likes it, she guesses, but tries to avoid it as she has had enough mushrooms for a lifetime. Her Lusus also seems to know about her secret passion for CLOWNS and tends to bring her posters and other clown-like artifacts to which Luxcia has to hide before letting anyone know she loves their silly and comical ways when she is trying to be a ruthless troll of importance.

Though she has a more recent obsession, this wiggler troll of 7 sweeps has been harassing her for the past month. This wouldn't be so bad if she managed to catch him and turn him into a trophy. Sadly CIRRIN RUNFAR has always eluded her grasp and traps, but this time it'll be different. Cause Luxcia is going to get the drop on him this time!

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Tell me what you guys think! 3:]

[BewareOfNerd]

1. Indigobloods pretty much never get psychic powers.
2. Describe her personality. Is she loud and hammy? Sadistic? Tomboyish? Does she have any friends? How does she feel about the hemospectrum?
3. Why balls and sacks? That sounds super weird. It seems more barbarian-y to mount people's heads on her walls or something.
4. Clowns are associated with the unpopular Subjugglator cult and regarded by most humans as creepy rather than funny. Perhaps use LOLcats or something instead? Not a huge deal, though.

[scintillatingMoniker]

1. Indigobloods pretty much never get psychic powers.

>.>

just adding my own input

[llamamiah]

1. Indigobloods pretty much never get psychic powers.

>.>

just adding my own input

I know it's been said that he shouldn't be used for reference, but still: Gamzee. That is all.

[scintillatingMoniker]

We don't know if gamzee's power is unique to him or a sburb thing yet, so we can't make judgements. Hussie said "maybe it's a subjuggulator thing" but he definately said maybe too much for that to be the actual answer.

So no, he is not a good example of a highblood with powers.

(it also helps that like 50% of the canon trolls are explicitly freaks of nature)

[Thunder Reign]

Hey hey folks, I'm new to this forum and well I lurk a lot but this thread caught my interest. I'm pretty big into character design and development but I feel like I can do much, much better with all my characters. I made my first troll not to long ago and thought I'd share her with you guys. Now note that her bio and everything isn't quite Homestuck but you should get the idea of who she is.

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Name: Luxcia Rokcaw
Gender: Female
Species: Troll
Posters: Barbarians and Vikings
Primary Skill: Slaughtering and Pillaging.
Secondary Skill: Making flesh balls and sacks.
Psychic Power: Telekinetic Squishing
Hobby: Killing Lowbloods, Looting said killed Lowblood's respiteblocks.
Bedroom Theme: Tribal and Barbaric
Bedroom Appearance: Neat and well organized.
Defining Trait: Fur Clothing
Symbol: Spade

Chumhandle: viciousDelicious
Text Color: #461B7E
Mannerisms: talks quiet to bring people in before YELLING IN THEIR EARS!!

Sylladex Modus and Description: Blood Rage: Luxcia has 10 card slots numbering 0-9. The numbers represent the approximate amount of blood in which she must pour onto the ground, always some poor sap! Her 0 Slot is always available to use and is always slotted with Flesh Balls or Sacks which some poor unsuspecting Lowblood had been turned into. Flesh Balls/Sacks can be stacked. It takes a couple seconds after the blood stops flowing before it calculates the amount of blood spilled.

Notable items: Punk Axe, Claws You Later, Flesh Ballx10

Strife Specibus: Axekind, Clawkind

Bio: Luxcia Rokcaw, a troll of 8 sweeps, enjoys the fantastic activities of adult trolls such as MURDERING and PILLAGING. She finds nothing more enjoyable then finding some pitiful Lowblood wigglers to squish into FLESH BALLS or SACKS with her CRUSHING PSYCHIC POWER. Afterward she takes a good look over said deceased wiggler's respiteblock for anything worth PILLAGING from their cold, dead hands.

Luxcia has a variety of interests which include BARBARIAN and VIKING MOVIES like Trollnan the Barbarian featuring Arnold Trollzenegger and Beotrul, which deals with an egotistical troll that goes around being all badass on adventures. She likes to HUNT and SKIN Furbeasts to later turn into fashionable fur clothing akin to her favorite BARBARIAN and VIKINGS. She Also collects and stores all her FLESH BALLS and SACKS in specific chests in her room all labeled and ORGANIZED by blood color. Despite her barbaric ways she makes sure her room is prim and proper, she is a neat monster after all.

She lives in a Hut-like respite block with her humanoid Mushroom Lesus. The thing always manages to creep her out with it insistent hugs and vegetable type dishes it tries to force her to eat. Overall she likes it, she guesses, but tries to avoid it as she has had enough mushrooms for a lifetime. Her Lusus also seems to know about her secret passion for CLOWNS and tends to bring her posters and other clown-like artifacts to which Luxcia has to hide before letting anyone know she loves their silly and comical ways when she is trying to be a ruthless troll of importance.

Though she has a more recent obsession, this wiggler troll of 7 sweeps has been harassing her for the past month. This wouldn't be so bad if she managed to catch him and turn him into a trophy. Sadly CIRRIN RUNFAR has always eluded her grasp and traps, but this time it'll be different. Cause Luxcia is going to get the drop on him this time!

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She is a character in the RP Spherecrossed. Tell me what you guys think! 3:]

1. Indigoblooded fantrolls should not have psychic powers, ever. Just have her be STRONG, like Equius or Feferi.
2. A spade is not a valid fantroll symbol, much like a heart/club/diamond wouldn't be either. They're quadrant symbols, not caste symbols- something different, please? Seriously, giving a troll a spade symbol makes you look like you're 13 and fresh from Deviantart.
3. Ugh, that outfit. She's dressed like a stripper. A fashionable stripper. If you won't give her more covered skin, at least make her outfit all black, since she sticks out like a sore thumb.
4. On Alternia, clowns don't equal funny, they equal subjugglators and thus fear and oppression. Like BON said, you ought to change it to lolcats or something else, because clowns just don't work.

[OrangeAipom]

2. A spade is not a valid fantroll symbol, much like a heart/club/diamond wouldn't be either. They're quadrant symbols, not caste symbols- something different, please? Seriously, giving a troll a spade symbol makes you look like you're 13 and fresh from Deviantart.
3. Ugh, that outfit. She's dressed like a stripper. A fashionable stripper. If you won't give her more covered skin, at least make her outfit all black, since she sticks out like a sore thumb.

I thought the stripperness of the outfit plus the spade went hand in hand.

[Karhs12]

Gamzee doesn't really count as psychic. Chucklevoodoos are, from what I understand, something that subjuggalators can do/create/whatever the verb is, but they never have any other powers.

[Blank]

Is the stripperness of the outfit refering to the sprite, the concept art, or both? The pretty in mink look is because most Alternian creatures seen have white albino fur or skin. I know he also has a version with brown fur instead.

[Teslamagnetic Integration]

The design reminds me of the giant Amazonian women from Futurama, actually. So it's less really stripperiffic, and more, well...I want to use the word "typical", but it's not quite the one I'm looking for.

[scintillatingMoniker]

Gamzee doesn't really count as psychic. Chucklevoodoos are, from what I understand, something that subjuggalators can do/create/whatever the verb is, but they never have any other powers.

We still don't know if hussie meant it when he said that.

Personally I still think he said "maybe" a few too many times for it to be that simple, and it's something unique to Gamz.

And besides that, we need to regulate troll's power levels in order to have fun, fair rp, and the only reason highbloods and lowbloods are equal strength-wise is because lowbloods get powers, highbloods get immunity. Making highblood and powers is just overpowered.

[Thunder Reign]

2. A spade is not a valid fantroll symbol, much like a heart/club/diamond wouldn't be either. They're quadrant symbols, not caste symbols- something different, please? Seriously, giving a troll a spade symbol makes you look like you're 13 and fresh from Deviantart.
3. Ugh, that outfit. She's dressed like a stripper. A fashionable stripper. If you won't give her more covered skin, at least make her outfit all black, since she sticks out like a sore thumb.

I thought the stripperness of the outfit plus the spade went hand in hand.

what no they're both terrible

[OrangeAipom]

2. A spade is not a valid fantroll symbol, much like a heart/club/diamond wouldn't be either. They're quadrant symbols, not caste symbols- something different, please? Seriously, giving a troll a spade symbol makes you look like you're 13 and fresh from Deviantart.
3. Ugh, that outfit. She's dressed like a stripper. A fashionable stripper. If you won't give her more covered skin, at least make her outfit all black, since she sticks out like a sore thumb.

I thought the stripperness of the outfit plus the spade went hand in hand.

what no they're both terrible

am i using figures of speech wrong?

[Thunder Reign]

Well, I assumed you meant in the sense that "oh but the stripper + spade things go so well together" in an overall "yes those are positive design aspects" way.

[MugenSpammer]

1. Indigoblooded fantrolls should not have psychic powers, ever. Just have her be STRONG, like Equius or Feferi.
2. A spade is not a valid fantroll symbol, much like a heart/club/diamond wouldn't be either. They're quadrant symbols, not caste symbols- something different, please? Seriously, giving a troll a spade symbol makes you look like you're 13 and fresh from Deviantart.
3. Ugh, that outfit. She's dressed like a stripper. A fashionable stripper. If you won't give her more covered skin, at least make her outfit all black, since she sticks out like a sore thumb.
4. On Alternia, clowns don't equal funny, they equal subjugglators and thus fear and oppression. Like BON said, you ought to change it to lolcats or something else, because clowns just don't work.

Finally I got some good feedback

To answer your points:
1.) Her power is rather weak. It really can't work on living beings and if it does it mostly just holds them. More of a terrifying think then anything, it is better to use on already dead creatures. Severe concentration is require to use it and can easily be messed with to lose said concentration.

2.) She is more Spade then anything else, like she is so far in the Spade Quadrant that it needs to be her symbol. Like that Spade can't stand not being with her. As for your offensive comparison, I would ask you be kind to a newbie good miss or sir. Till then I don't feel I should answer this question further then with more common Hussie Gags and Jokes.

3.) No Stripper I've seen wears fur tassets, believe me I should know. As for the fur color, that was out of my hands. I wanted Brown but from what I can tell there are no Brown Creatures living on Alternia and I think white is a normal color for them. I also think she'd be to bothered to dye the clothes, Luxcia Rokcaw is not a patient lady.

4.) That there is a very good point. I see I've looked at it like a little pink human wiggler and didn't look at it from a Troll perspective. This means I'll have to find a way for her to still hide her love for clowns, any suggestions are welcome.


Also, she does indeed change between five outfits which at some point will give her powers and such. Outfit two is themed after a Pirate :3

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[MugenSpammer]

1. Indigobloods pretty much never get psychic powers.
2. Describe her personality. Is she loud and hammy? Sadistic? Tomboyish? Does she have any friends? How does she feel about the hemospectrum?
3. Why balls and sacks? That sounds super weird. It seems more barbarian-y to mount people's heads on her walls or something.
4. Clowns are associated with the unpopular Subjugglator cult and regarded by most humans as creepy rather than funny. Perhaps use LOLcats or something instead? Not a huge deal, though.

More good stuff.

1.) I've already went over this one in my last post so that one is all cool.

2.)She is loud, obnoxious, and compulsive. She is easily able to wax obsidian for anyone who can best her in combat or manages to escape her. She hate mushrooms and hugs, finds entertainment by slaughter, and loves her trophies. I could go on for much longer but you get most of it. She doesn't have any friends, not till later as she tends to kill most things. As for the Hemospectrum, anything lower then her is worthy of Trophying. She is proud to be a highblood and finds the current rule very satisfactory.

3.) They are super weird, but they also serve a purpose. Her Sylladex Modus requires her to spill blood, the balls and sacks are crushed and compacted blood inside flesh for easy removal of items without having to find something to kill. They sound worse then they really are and I assume they are to be the brunt of jokes later on, as she is super serious about them and there is no way anyone can be serious about them.

4.) It's more of a "I like Clowns" thing then anything. It also pertains to her final powers so it is important, as unpopular as Clowns seem to be.