PREQUEL suggestion box (thread 3)

[Coffeetiem]

Dmitri: Heal yourself. You ain't done yet!

If not possible....

Katia: Feel a disturbance....

[MrSquidon]

>CRAWL TO THE KITTENS.
>HUG THE KITTENS.
>HUG THEM ONE LAST TIME.

[LiquidDinosaur]

Kaz did you actually receive a $45,000 bribe from the Illuminati to make this story go on happily? Or did someone just copy your art style rather well?
Here I'll post it in spoilers:

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Here's the initial proposal:

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We, /co/, could pool our money, combine our resources, and influence the happenings in this story directly. Unknown to other readers, we would be the subtle guiding current, pushing the story in all the right directions.

We could be the Illuminati of Prequel Adventure.

Old men, running the world. A new age.

Then came this reply, with someone who put their name as Kazered:

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After receiving your transfer of 45 thousand dollars I have come up with a way to make the story happier.

See, next update is going to jump back in time a couple minutes where we will meet Alternate Future Landorumil, revealed to be the Douche of Time. He'll save Dmitri, then later go back and save himself, and the plot will continue as normal with everyone alive (and two Landorumils. Can you say shipping ;D ?). Then later we'll have a plot arc following the dead versions of Dmitri and Landorumil in the afterlife.

It'll be amazing.

While making this post and thinking about the Illuminati or whatever, I realized something: Katia has Night Eye and Eye of Terror, in other words....... Her vision is augmented.
Katia: Get sunglasses. Using Night Eye to balance out the vision loss, wear them all the time.

[FredMSloniker]

Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy?

Gharug failed to mention Kvatch in his list of places to sell the ring. Ask him why.

This must be done.

When will you people learn that if you give the author a chance to inflict suffering, he'll take it? Hell, he just pulled a suggestion in from page 54, when Gharug had just appeared, ignoring the suggester's four subsequent suggestions that involved keeping Dmitri alive.

At this point, I'm not sure I should offer comments anymore. I'm not abandoning reading the story--it's got nice art and some funny/awesome moments--but I'm having trouble not taking it too seriously. The running gag about Kvatch just turned two amusing characters into a murderer and a corpse...

[Solifuge]

Ack, my little butterfly heart... </3

Folks, we get (sort of) exactly the story we suggest. Maybe we can all think twice before suggesting any of our other favorite characters die, eh? Kaz doesn't pull them punches! I'm definitely bummed, but it is what it is!

> Dmitri: if you've got any HP left in that body of yours, you'll crawl over to that forgotten Gift Basket, and quaff Restoration Potions like you've never Quaffed before. If drinking them fails from having your throat slit, just chug 'em through that open esophagus... potions still work that way, right?

[The_Codfish]

Goddammit! Even when horrible things happen, it's still funny to me!

Dmitri: Go to necromancer heaven.

[passing_by]

That's a fallen for-leaf clover on the ground, right?
>get the clover

>Dmitri: if you've got any HP left in that body of yours, you'll crawl over to that forgotten Gift Basket, and quaff Restoration Potions like you've never Quaffed before. If drinking them fails from having your throat slit, just chug 'em through that open esophagus... potions still work that way, right?

>cast HUG ALL KITTENS as you(hopefully) heal.

[Algeroth]

Dmitri: You call yourself a redguard? You are a disgrace. ADRENALINE RUSH, rise and shine and cast heal on yourself.

[Pirox]

Dmitry: rest sweet angel, shh, only cats now. ;_;

Anyway, let`s ditch that loser and come back with Katia.

Katia: note to yourself: WE DON`T TALK. ABOUT THE FUCKIN. KVATCH MAGES GUILD. EVER.

P Man, this is so sad. Is like the death of Nepeta, version 2.0. Why cat lovers must die first? ;_;

[McFrugal]

Dmitri: Oh come on, you don't bleed out that fast from a cut to the neck. Cast heal.

Also, suggesters: Stop being dumb.
Kazerad: Stop taking the dumbest suggestions.

[The_Codfish]

OH WAIT, WHO WILL TAKE CARE OF THE KITTENS NOW?

[Pirox]

OH WAIT, WHO WILL TAKE CARE OF THE KITTENS NOW?

Kittens: Devour Dmitri corpse.

Dmitri: Become one with the cats.

Kittens & Dmitri: Become the "KITTEN THAT MEOWS"!


[Like this, but with kittens.]

Shh, it`s alright, I got this. I`m a fucking genius.

[Kazerad]

Kaz did you actually receive a $45,000 bribe from the Illuminati to make this story go on happily? Or did someone just copy your art style rather well?

I made that post, but I did not actually receive a 45,000 dollar bribe.

But seriously for 45 thousand dollars I'll make anything happen in this story.

At this point, I'm not sure I should offer comments anymore. I'm not abandoning reading the story--it's got nice art and some funny/awesome moments--but I'm having trouble not taking it too seriously. The running gag about Kvatch just turned two amusing characters into a murderer and a corpse...

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Don't feel too down about it; Dmitri was more or less doomed from the start. It's not that you guys did anything wrong, it's just that his function in the story was simply to foreshadow/develop existing characters/concepts. While in some ways this is like a game, it's also a story that requires me to carefully manage how much information the readers have and how they feel about different characters. Sometimes, criminals are dogs characters are tools.

One of the major concepts I'm experimenting with is a "time delay" in commands. For example, when you encourage Dmitri to chug a potion through his slit throat, even if he can't do it himself you might unknowingly be determining a potential event that could occur for someone else in the future. To the "player", this comes across as a delayed command. For the "reader", this comes across as foreshadowing - a slit throat re-emerges as an event, but with a potentially different outcome. Dmitri as a character may have been doomed, but who knows how many things your choices here have determined. At least one of them (the ring) is obvious.

[Player(2)]

Kittens:
Your provider/master/father has just been killed. This travesty must be avenged.
You felines are a noble and fearsome species of hunters. It's time to put those skills to use and find the Orc responsible for this.
Before you depart on this quest of vengeance search around other rooms, with your cat agility and stealth, for any magical items that might help you on this quest. Rings would be nice as they fit very nicely over your tails.

After you get your revenge think about finding this Katia your provider/master/father seemed so infatuated with.

[MagicHats]

Dimitri: Suddenly be a khajjit when you wake up(but not katia)

[masonthekiller]

Dmitri: Stop playing dead, dumb-ass. Heal yourself before you really die. There is stuff to be done!

[The_Codfish]

Yeah, guys, Kazerad just basically confirmed that Dmitri IS dead now. Though he also said that one of our commands may one day save someone in the future. So....

>Dmitri: RISE FROM THE DEAD.

[Tayruu]

> Katia: Suddenly become incredibly anxious (for reasons not obvious to you, obviously).

> Dmitri: Reincarnate. Become a black-comedy side plot.
EDIT: ... more black-comedic than the main plot.

[Snowmanne]

> Dmitri: Reincarnate. Become a black-comedy side plot.

THATS RACISTS.gif

[Tayruu]

... oh. bahahaha oops

[vdrake77]

Dmitri: You're a necromancer, damn it. You aren't about to let your own soul just wander aimlessly, or worse yet, go where it's supposed to. Go find Katia. Confess your love. Tell her what went down. You're dead now, people have to say nice things about you, it's the general rule, so they can't mock your strange attraction to the delightful feel of cat fur. And now, you can help her stay alive with your own spectral magic. Even if you're just capable of firing a weak spark or two, you can watch her back. Perhaps 'Hug all kittens' still works when you're dead.

if all else fails, POSSESS YOUR DEAD CAT AND SEEK OUT KATIA.

[Cobalt]

Kittens:
Your provider/master/father has just been killed. This travesty must be avenged.
You felines are a noble and fearsome species of hunters. It's time to put those skills to use and find the Orc responsible for this.
Before you depart on this quest of vengeance search around other rooms, with your cat agility and stealth, for any magical items that might help you on this quest. Rings would be nice as they fit very nicely over your tails.

After you get your revenge think about finding this Katia your provider/master/father seemed so infatuated with.

Awakened undead necromancy-slinging cat collective out for VENGEANCE!

That could actually be pretty scary if you think about it. Cats are really agile and can climb walls and get into all manner of places that they aren't supposed to. Imagine if there were six or more of them imbued with a sinister hive intelligence and able to drain your soul or raise the dead, and their main purpose in (un)life was seeing you die.

[Niall]

Dmitri's Back-Up Plan: Kick in.

[Oldenheimer1913]

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+5 points for a Deus Ex reference. Points towards what, exactly? Hell if I know.

[Crumplehat]

Prequel Suggestion Pantheon: Mourn doomed but loved side character forever, hopefully having learned lesson about the responsibility of being part of Pantheon, realizing that ALL characters are probably DOOMED because THIS IS KAZERAD we are talking about here.

Katia: Have sudden feeling of fate-precarious paranoia for no discernible reason, more so than usual.