Bluntly, it is horrible.
Every single thing you have done contradicts the setting.
I mean, this is not an anime character type setting. You should use your own creativity to create your nation, rather than taking from the anime you've seen. The gratuitous japanese is quite frankly, annoying. The whole 'alternate dimension' thing, again, does not mesh with the setting. Your bonuses are ridiculous, you should only have two, not two broken into seven parts. The powerful person leading the regiment seems to conflict, the point seems to be for armies, not heroes. Now, possibly, if you want to try again, and create a new army, that would be fine! I'm sure none of us would mind if you would use your creativity to come up with an original idea, and we can even answer questions if asked.